21.01.07 (목) English writing + Revised

Today’s Topic

You are hosting a group of foreigners in Korea. Write a short essay about the top five travel destinations in Korea. Use lots of details about each place to help the visitors learn.

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My Answer

Korea has many beautiful areas. I think the top 5 place is Moon Kyeong. There is Makgeolli making house. It will give foreigners a new experience! And next, the top 4 place is Gang Ju. There is delicious Korean food. Next, the top 3 place is Seoul. Seoul has anything they want. There are international restaurants and a number of bars. And the top 2 place is Gang Won-do. There is a natural landscape. It is so beautiful. Lastly the top 1 place I think the Jeju-island. It has a smaller island selected the World heritage. And there is good quality seafood and also a huge aquarium, beautiful beach, and good weather. I like it, so I'm so sad that I don't visit there. My introduction is done. If you want to travel to Korea, remember this place. You will never regret the travel.

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Revised Writing
Korea has many beautiful areas.
I think the one on the 5th place is Moon Kyeong.
There is a house that makes makgeolli there.
It will give foreigners a new experience!
Next, the 4th placer is Gwang Ju.
There is delicious Korean food in that place.
Next, the top 3 is Seoul.
Seoul has anything they want.
There are international restaurants and a number of bars there.
And the second placer is Gang Won-do.
There is a natural landscape in that area.
It is so beautiful.
Lastly, the one on the first place, in my opinion, is Jeju Island.
It has a smaller island selected as a World Heritage Site.
And there is good quality seafood there as well as a huge aquarium, beautiful beaches, and good weather.
I like it, so I’m so sad that I never visit there because of COVID-19.
My introduction is done.
If you want to travel to Korea, remember these places.
You will never regret your travel.

*placer ??
*as well as 뿐만 아니라, ~에 더하여.

*고유명사와 도시이름 같은 것들은 첫 글자를 대문자로 적어야한다.
*외래어로 표현되는 단어, 구는 이탤릭체로 표기된다. ex) makgeolli
(Foreign words, words used as words, and letters used as letters are italicized.)